I want You (A ‘2-Minute Write’ Story)

A little late (as usual) but here’s my response to JD Maders (Unemployed Imagination) 2 minute write challenge…  

2 Minute timer set…. And Go….

Amber couldn’t help but notice that there was something different about the way Mike had been acting towards her that day, especially that evening at the last night dinner and dance.  She couldn’t help but notice the way he kept looking at her in a way that made her heart rate pick up, the way he had kept close to her side all evening, and the way he would place his hands possessively against her lower back in a quiet (yet universal) way of telling the other guys around to “Back Off”.  She had been wanting to ask him what was up with all that but the right opportunity never posed itself.

Now, as Mike lead her into there shared hotel room, she found herself wanting to ask again.  Instead her breath caught in her throat as Mike reached around her to lock the door to their room – Not just the regular lock, but the “Do Not Disturb” lock.  Her rate increased even more.

“Mike” Amber whispered, his name barely a breathe on her lips…

“Dammit Amber, I want you”

That was actually over 2 minutes but I just couldn’t leave the story hanging in mid thought.  It is also part of a larger story that had taken shape (partly anyway) in my mind.  It starts out with Amber and Mike (who knew each other previously to the start of the story) ending up in the same hotel room, in the same bed (unbeknown to the other at first).  As luck (or lack thereof) would have it there is no other rooms available, nor any at any of the nearby hotels.(with the exception of a sleazy, hooker-style, one).

Another quick note:  I have been undecided (grammar-wise) if that last sentence of the story should read “Dammit Amber, I want you” (as it already does; “Dammit, Amber, I want you”; or “Dammit Amber I want you”  I keep playing with it in my mind and all of them sound correct and yet none of them stand-out as being the best.way.

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